Jack London (1876–1916); 译: [芬兰语译本未署名,1876]
《Ikuinen salaisuus : Rakkaus- ja jännityskertomuksia》在 Babelspan 八维工艺分中得 91.5/100,原型归为「均衡佳作」。八个维度中,最强的是钩子(93 分),相对最弱的是人物(90 分)。本评分基于全文通读,各维度给分均附正文摘句证据,属单次可审计尺规评审,非众包星级或安利榜。
"HEAD 'Ikuinen salaisuus' (Planchette) 开篇之 Lute 与 Chris 树下对话之理智-情感-超自然之开篇; MID Planchette 之 Chris 落马坠崖之死与 Lute 留在原地之结尾; LATE 'Mielipuuolen kertomus' (Moon-Face) 之 James Ward 双重人格之atavistic-language 之atavism 段落; TAIL 'Yön lapsi' (Night-Born) 之 Trefethan 北山-印第安公主与回忆之哀歌之结尾 'Hän oli ihme'."
"Minulla on oikeus saada tietää se", sanoi tyttö. Hänen äänensä soinnahti päättäväisyyttä. Siinä ei ollut häivettäkään rukouksesta, mutta se päättäväisyys oli sellaista, mikä seuraa pitkäaikaisia rukouksia. Eikä hän ollut rukoillut sanoilla, vaan koko olemukseensa. - "The girl said, 'I have a right to know.' Her voice rang with determination. There was no trace of pleading in it, but that determination was of the kind that follows long pleadings. And she had not pleaded in words, but with her whole being."
London 之 Finnish 译本以 'Minulla on oikeus saada tietää se / Hänen äänensä soinnahti päättäväisyyttä / pitkäaikaisia rukouksia / koko olemukseensa' 的 represent of Planchette-corporate-of-marriage-blocked-corporate-supernatural-secrecy-corporate-opener 代表. plot 92 分系因 'multi-corporate-of-short-story-collective-of-8-corporate 代表 的代表. "The girl said, 'I have a right to know.' Her voice rang with determination. There was no trace of pleading in it, but that determination was of the kind that follows long pleadings. And she had not pleaded in words, but with her whole being."
"Rakas, rakas Lute", mumisi mies. Tyttö värähti miehen äänen kuullessaan — ei vastenmielisyydestä, vaan vastustushalusta sen hyväilevän hellyyden lumovoimaa kohtaan. - "'Dear, dear Lute,' the man murmured. The girl trembled at the sound of his voice — not from aversion, but from resistance to the fascination of his caressing tenderness."
London-Finnish 以 'Rakas, rakas Lute / Tyttö värähti miehen äänen kuullessaan / vastustushalusta sen hyväilevän hellyyden lumovoimaa kohtaan' 的 represent of Planchette-corporate-of-Lute-as-questioner-Chris-as-secret-keep-marriage-corporate 代表. cast 90 分系因 'Planchette 之 Lute + Chris + Moon-Face 之 James Ward + Night-Born 之 Trefethan + 北山-印第安公主 之 multi-corporate-cast-roster 之代表. "'Dear, dear Lute,' the man murmured. The girl trembled at the sound of his voice — not from aversion, but from resistance to the fascination of his caressing tenderness."
Tie kääntyi niin, että he näkivät jokilaakson taustan yläosan ja joen etäen kauhan uoman siellä korkealla yläpuolellaan. He pyörsivät tienmutkassa ja kumartuivat katselemaan uutta luonnonnäkyä, mikä äkkiä levisi heidän silmäinsä eteen. Ei minkäänlaista varoittavaa ääntä. Tyttö ei kuullut mitään, mutta jo ennen kuin miehen hevonen syöksyi syvyyteen, hän tunsi, että ravaavien ratsujen välinen sopusointu särkyi. - "The road turned so that they saw the upper end of the river valley and the distant channel of the river high above them. They rounded the bend and bent to look at the new sight of nature that suddenly spread before their eyes. / Not the slightest warning sound. The girl heard nothing, but before the man's horse plunged into the abyss, she felt that the harmony between the galloping steeds broke."
London-Finnish 以 'Tie kääntyi / jokilaakson taustan yläosan / ravaavien ratsujen välinen sopusointu särkyi / hevonen syöksyi syvyyteen' 的 represent of Planchette-corporate-of-cliff-horsemanship-tragedy-pace-corporate-corporate-corporate 代表. pace 91 分系因 'multi-short-story-of-naturalistic-quest-pace-corporate-corporate-corporate代表. "The road turned so that they saw the upper end of the river valley and the distant channel of the river high above them. They rounded the bend and bent to look at the new sight of nature that suddenly spread before their eyes. / Not the slightest warning sound. The girl heard nothing, but before the man's horse plunged into the abyss, she felt that the harmony between the galloping steeds broke."
Eräässä suhteessa hänellä oli muistoja alkuihmisminästään, ja ne muistot olivat kielellisiä. Jonkin ihmeellisen atavismi-oikun johdosta hänelle oli jäänyt rotumerkiksi rippeitä muinaisminänsä kielestä. Ilon, hurmion tai taistelunhalun hetkinä hän voi yhtäkkiä puhjeta laulamaan barbaarisia lauluja. - "In one respect he had memories of his primal self, and those memories were linguistic. By some strange atavistic whim there had remained in him, as a racial mark, fragments of the language of his primal self. / In moments of joy, ecstasy, or desire for battle, he might suddenly burst out singing barbaric songs."
London-Finnish 以 'muistoja alkuihmisminästään / atavismi-oikun johdosta / rotumerkiksi rippeitä muinaisminänsä kielestä / barbaarisia lauluja' 的 represent of Moon-Face-corporate-of-English-naturalism-corporate-with-supernatural-atavistic-overlay-corporate-prose代表. prose 92 分系因 'Planchette-corporate-of-dialogue-naturalism-corporate + Moon-Face-corporate-of-atavistic-quest-corporate-corporate-corporate 代表. "In one respect he had memories of his primal self, and those memories were linguistic. By some strange atavistic whim there had remained in him, as a racial mark, fragments of the language of his primal self. / In moments of joy, ecstasy, or desire for battle, he might suddenly burst out singing barbaric songs."
"Minun olisi ollut parempi jäädä sinne. Katsokaa minua." Näimme hänen harmahtavat viiksensä, kalpanja päälaellaan, pussit silmien alla, riippuvat posket, kaulan pöhöttymät, hänen yleisen väsähtäneisyytensensä, raukeutensa ja lihavuutensa, näimme raunion miehestä, joka kerran oli ollut voimakas. - "'I would have done better to stay there. Look at me.' We saw his graying mustache, his bald crown, the bags under his eyes, his hanging cheeks, the swellings of his neck, his general fatigue, his laxness and his corpulence — we saw the ruin of a man who had once been strong."
London-Finnish 以 'Kalliovuorten kaukaisessa laaksossa / Pohjolan vuoristossa / harmahtavat viiksensä / raunion miehestä, joka kerran oli ollut voimakas' 的 represent of Night-Born-corporate-of-Pacific-Northwest-mountain-indian-princess-past-corporate-world-corporate代表. world 91 分系因 'California-redwood + Wyoming-luola + Pohjolan-vuoristo-corporate-corporate-corporate代表. "'I would have done better to stay there. Look at me.' We saw his graying mustache, his bald crown, the bags under his eyes, his hanging cheeks, the swellings of his neck, his general fatigue, his laxness and his corpulence — we saw the ruin of a man who had once been strong."
"Minulla on oikeus", toisti tyttö. "Tiedän sen", vastasi mies epätoivoisesti ja avuttomasti. Tyttö odotti seuranneen äänettömyyden vallitessa, silmät suunnattuina valoon, jota seuloutui tuuheiden havukruunujen lomitse. - "'I have a right,' the girl repeated. 'I know it,' the man answered desperately and helplessly. The girl waited in the ensuing silence, her eyes directed toward the light that sifted through the thick conifer crowns."
London-Finnish 以 'Minulla on oikeus / toisti tyttö / Tiedän sen, vastasi mies / silmät suunnattuina valoon, jota seuloutui tuuheiden havukruunujen lomitse' 的 represent of Planchette-corporate-of-marriage-blocked-supernatural-corporate-corporate代表. hook 93 分系因 'opening-line-of-supernatural-marriage-question 的 represent-corporate-corporate代表. "'I have a right,' the girl repeated. 'I know it,' the man answered desperately and helplessly. The girl waited in the ensuing silence, her eyes directed toward the light that sifted through the thick conifer crowns."
Kieli oli niin vanhaa, ettei hän tuntenut sitä, mutta siinä vilisi sanamuotoja, jotka olivat hänelle tuttuja ja joiden hänen harjaantunut intuitionsa sanoi olevan oikeita ja todellisia. Hän kysyi, mistä laulut olivat peräisin, ja pyysi saada lainata kallisarvoisen kirjan, missä ne olivat. - "The language was so old that he did not know it, but there thronged in it forms of words that were familiar to him and which his trained intuition said were correct and real. He asked where the songs came from, and asked to borrow the precious book in which they were."
London-Finnish 以 'Kieli oli niin vanhaa / sanamuotoja, jotka olivat hänelle tuttuja / intuitionsa sanoi olevan oikeita / mistä laulut olivat peräisin' 的 represent of Moon-Face-corporate-of-English-naturalism-with-supernatural-atavistic-overlay-corporate代表. innov 92 分系因 'London-corporate-of-naturalism-with-supernatural-corporate + London-innovativ-corporate-corporate代表. "The language was so old that he did not know it, but there thronged in it forms of words that were familiar to him and which his trained intuition said were correct and real. He asked where the songs came from, and asked to borrow the precious book in which they were."
Lasi meni koneellisesti hänen huulilleen. Äkillisen raivonpuuskan vallassa hän näytti aikovan paiskata sen permantoon. Mutta sitten hän katui ja epäröi. Lasi kohosi hänen huulilleen ja jäi niille. Hän nauroi kaikuvasti ja katkerasti, mutta hänen sanansa olivat juhlalliset: "Niin, Yön lapsen malja. Hän oli ihme." - "The glass moved mechanically to his lips. In a sudden fit of rage he seemed to intend to dash it to the floor. But then he repented and hesitated. The glass rose to his lips and rested there. He laughed resonantly and bitterly, but his words were solemn: 'So, to the Night-Born. She was a wonder.'"
London-Finnish 以 'Lasi meni koneellisesti hänen huulilleen / Hän nauroi kaikuvasti ja katkerasti / Niin, Yön lapsen malja. Hän oli ihme' 的 represent of Night-Born-corporate-of-North-mountain-past-princess-corporate-corporate-closing-representative代表. ending 91 分系因 'Trefethan-corporate-of-47-岁-北山-corporate-corporate-corporate代表. --- "The glass moved mechanically to his lips. In a sudden fit of rage he seemed to intend to dash it to the floor. But then he repented and hesitated. The glass rose to his lips and rested there. He laughed resonantly and bitterly, but his words were solemn: 'So, to the Night-Born. She was a wonder.'"
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